Ross, a 21 year old male woke and looked around him, he was lying in his own bed. He rolled on to his side and saw a small piece of note paper laying strategically placed. Realising he was wearing his clothes from last night - a shirt and jeans, he began to wonder what actually happened the night before. He picked up the note, but before he could read it, he caught his reflection in the mirror. His dark short hair was ruffled and messy. His brown eyes looked heavy and tired. Once Ross' eyes focused he realised the slightly faded lipstick mark on his cheek. As he stood open the curtains, he stumbled slightly, nearly knocking his head on the curtain rail.
He picks up the note and walks to the bathroom, after washing his face, he sits down and opens the note, he slowly reads the quickly scribbled note over a couple of times, folds the note in half and and puts it in his trouser pocket.
He moves to the front door. Thinks to himself for a minute, with a solemn expression and walked through the door, closing it gently behind him.
Outside laid his work colleague Ben, he was face down in the flower bed, with no top on. Ross went over to him to wake him up. Just as he knelt down, Ben wearily tried to lift himself up from the dirt, picking off clumps of soil from his muddy face.
Ross' phone started to vibrate 'Jenny Calling' appears on the screen; he answers. He clears his throat. "Hello Jenny" He says, slightly concerned. He knew that she was involved in the last nights antics, and he knows that the note was from her. Ross eagerly listened to Jenny, who was asking him if he was free that day. It was important, things needed to be said. "Erm" he hesitated "Well I guess we could stop for a coffee? Starbucks at 1:00" Jenny was eager about seeing him as she happily agreed. They said they're goodbyes and hung up. He put his phone back into his pocket.
Running past the passed out Ben in the Garden, Ross sprinted to the Bus Stop. 5 minutes later the bus arrived. As he entered the city centre he thought about what on earth he was going to tell Jenny. Starbucks was crowded and on their usual black sofa, there was Jenny with his coffee and two sugars, waiting. Jenny looked up and smiled. "So, how was last night with my sister? Did you plan the reception for our wedding- I cant believe your making the whole venue a surprise!" Looking in the reflection of the mirror, Ross saw the lipstick stain, he quickly put his hang against his face to cover it up. "Whats that mark on your face Ross?" Asked Jenny.
Luckily I was very happy with the way in which the narrative went. This was the theme of the story that I had in mind. I just pictured a 'morning after the night before' scenario is always an interesting one to explore. The only bit that I wasnt totally sure i was greatly keen on, was his friend lying in hedge in the garden. However I guess the person writing it, just wanted to ensure that the audience or reader really understood that some kind of party occurred previously.
I think that the opening would make a very good start to a film. The ambiguity of what actually happened the night before sets us up for a good story, which can in fact be taken in many different directions. A director could choose to make the film flash back to the night before or events leading up. Or events after Jenny found out about Ross' encounter with her sister.
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